if any 1 has some ideas to make this sound better email me

E]----------------------------------
B]----------------------------------
G]-------5-------2-------4-------2--
D]-----2-------2-------0-------2----
A]---3-------0-------3-------0------
E]-5-------3-------1-------3--------

THERE IS ALSO THIS

E]------------------------------------
B]------------------------------------
G]-------5-------5-------5------5-----
D]-----7-------7-------7------7-------
A]---5-------5-------5------5---------
E]-7-------9-------5------3-----------

IF YOU CAN HELP ME ON THIS IT WOULD BE ALOT OF HELP